better flow: Before: The weather was really nice today. I went for a walk in the park. The park was really crowded though. There were a lot of people there. I saw some kids playing on the swings. They looked like they were having fun. I also saw some dogs running around. They were so cute. Overall, it was a good day. After: The weather was really nice today. I went for a walk in the park. Although, it was quite crowded with a lot of people. I saw some kids playing on the swings and having fun. There were also some cute dogs running around. Overall, it was a good day.